My final project is not really going well. Although I have already have my main thesis but the problem for my speech is lack of humor. I usually add a huge amount of humor for all of my speech. However, I realize my project is more toward using logical reasoning to persuade audience but not attracting audience so I am stuck on it. I am now finished with my thesis and body paragraphs but in these body paragraphs I think I am lack of personal details or stories that made it cliche. The good part of my speech is I had a great start which really attracts readers. Also, the topic closely relates to life being in Cheshire Academy so it might attract to Cheshire Academy students. Also, I tried to appeal to touch with variety groups of students on campus to make my speech attractive. However, I think I have more room of improvement to et my speech appeal to larger group of people because my thesis :pay more attention to now but not future, closely relates to every human being. Other improvements I can think of is grammatical. As an international student, I acknowledge my inability to make my speech without any grammar mistake. I might need to go to writing center to improve my grammar skill. Also, word choice limited my persuading efficiency. With more precise adjective to describe my emotion and the examples I listed in my speech might make the speech more persuasive. Other improvements might be add more attractive personal story that relates to my thesis. However, it is hard for my age to find any attracting personal story that is unique from others so I might need to make up stories that sounds real. Overall, I had my main points written down but I have huge space for improvements such as grammatical, word choice and personal stories.
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